Monday, April 8, 2013

Cecilia's Fate, Round Three

So, after talking to my friend Taylor, I rearranged it so that it's completely chronological, and that's about it. Maybe just a few little details in the description of Cecilia.  This is what got submitted to the Writing Contest, so, I hope the revisions were for the better! 
 
 
Cecilia’s Fate

by Kayleigh McKay

 

 

            It was cold, and the sidewalks were coated with a layer of slush so that she had to step in the footprints left behind by others to keep her shoes dry.  No one had expected it to snow that day, it was too far into spring.

            The snow had only recently fallen—during the last few hours of the school day.  She had spent all of her fifth grade Arithmetic’s class craning her neck to watch the flakes come down and then melt on the street below.  She had been in a world where snowflakes were solid pieces of air, and when there was too much air in the world, some of it turned to snow and fell out of the sky.

            She was an average looking girl—her long dark hair fell loose and tangled down her shoulders.  She wore the same pair of black leather shoes that all the other girls wore.  Except her family didn’t have enough money to buy her new shoes that fit, or to repair the ones she had.  The soles were worn and along the seams there were holes.

            When the school day was over and groups of students poured out the doors and over the steps of the school, she walked home by herself—no one else lived where she did.

            There was only one set of footprints in the slush, and she hoped that whoever came before her was going was going the same way she was. 

            Her walk home to her family’s apartment was only a few blocks, but the wind and the weight of the books under her arm stretched out the streets and slowed down time.  The walk became too long.

            Across the street from her apartment building was a dumpy old fairground.  She’d heard that the city was going to tear it down as part of the president’s New Deal plan.  They were going to build another apartment complex.

            Today, there was something new to the fairground, a kind of light and sparkle that she’d never seen before.  Just inside the rotted wooden gate was a horse-drawn wagon.  It was colored a bright and obscene green.  The paint was old and discolored such that it appeared in different shades as she approached the wagon.

            The lurid green color was so out of place in the endless gray of the city that she was drawn to it, heedless of the cold soaking into her shoes.  Her footprints veered off the sidewalk and crossed into the road.

            It wasn’t like the wagons that sold vegetables at the markets—this was like the wagons in the photographs of the pioneers who first ventured out to the west.  It wasn’t roofed however, by canvas, but rather with wood—it even had its own tiny chimney jutting out from one side.  It was more common for vendors to use automobiles, but not unheard of for horse-drawn wagons to still come to market.

            As she crossed from the road to the opposite sidewalk, a young man appeared from out of the wagon.  He clambered down a set of rickety stairs extending from the rear of the wagon to the ground.

            The man came around to the front of the wagon and stopped short when he saw the little girl.  He was too tall and too skinny.  He father would have called him “a beanpole”.  There was a mess of earth-colored hair that fell somewhere between his shoulders and his ears.  He was a funny looking man—his eyes seemed too big for his face, and he wore boots furrier than a mink coat—

            “What?” the man said, looking down at his feet, “They’re better in snow than those ridiculous holey things you’re wearing!”

            She blinked.  “I’m sorry, I—I didn’t mean to be rude.”

            He waved her apology off, “I’m not really offended.”  He turned and took a few steps back towards the wagon, then stopped.  “Aren’t you coming?”  The man turned again to look at her.

            She shook her head.

            He sighed.  “What’s the difference between over there,” he indicated the sidewalk, “and over here?”

            She stood just shy of the open gate.  The girl shook her head again.

            The young man looked exasperated.  “But I’ve got something for you!  It’s very special and I don’t think anyone else should have it.”

            The girl crossed her arms.  “What is it?” she asked with the voice her mother reserved for haggling with shopkeepers.

            “I won’t show you if you don’t come over here.”

 

            The inside of the man’s wagon was the strangest thing she’d ever seen. 

            There were two workbenches running opposite each other on either side.  Above the workbenches were shelves, cluttered with strange and obscure books with symbols on the spines that she would never see again in her life.  In between the books were haphazardly placed gadgets.  They were mechanical in nature, and defied all the young girl’s attempts to guess their function.

            There was a small fire towards the front of the wagon—no doubt attached to that odd little chimney.  The light from the flames lit the small space with a strong orange glow. 

            The young man sat on a wheeled stool and flew from one bench to the other with an air of much practice.  The spaced was cramped and the man hunched over—with his over large eyes, this made him look bird-like.  He was rummaging through drawers and looking under stacks of paper.  Finally, he found what was hers.

            It was a key.  It was old—antique—and had mother-of-pearl laid into the handle.  It had her name on it—Cecilia.  The letters looped and curled into themselves.  If she had tried to trace the path of a single line she would’ve gotten lost and stared at it forever.  The lines of her name would begin to dance and shift if she stared at them for long enough.

            The man didn’t want any money in exchange for the key.  He said it had been hers for quite some time and she pretended to believe him.

            “This key will fit into any lock, but the doors it opens…they will not take you to any place you know.  Listen to me because this is important,” he leaned in close to her and she realized that she could not name the color of his large glassy eyes.  “Are you listening?”

            “Yes,” the girl squirmed uncomfortably.

            “Good.  Once you use this key, and enter—you’re not paying attention!”

            Her eyes snapped back up to his.  She had been watching the letters on the key writhe around.  “Sorry,” she set the key down on the workbench.  It was heavier than she expected it to be.

            “Nothing that you see will ever be the same way again.  What you choose to do with this key is the most important decision of your life.”

            She didn’t want to be around him anymore—he was now no longer simply intriguing.  Now, he was talking nonsense, as her father would say.  He was probably one of those people that belong in a sanitarium.  “What are you talking about?  You’re not making any sense.” said her mother’s haggling voice. 

            The man became impatient.  “It’s a place, another place.  Don’t you read adventure books?”

            “They’re not real,” she insisted, petulantly, like an adult.

            “This place is real.”

            “Oh yeah?  Well, show me a map of it then.”  This was a child’s voice.

            “Only madmen make maps of the other world.”

            “Why?”

            “Because it is impossible to know.  It has many different…layers—levels.  It doesn’t function the way this world does.”

            She decided then that he did belong in a sanitarium, and the young man could sense that he had lost her.  His thin angular shoulders drooped.  He sighed.  “I’m sorry,” he said “but that key isn’t yours anymore.  You should go now.”

            Her eyebrows came together and she opened her mouth to ask a question, but the man waved her off and slid the key away from her.  It fell into his pocket.

            So the girl went, and stepped back into the footprints on the other sidewalk, and felt relieved when she passed the fairground the next day on her way to school and saw that the wagon was gone and the old wooden gate was closed.

            The snow had melted away and so she was free to walk wherever she chose.  Neither the man nor the wagon was there when she went home in the evening.  None of her friends had noticed them at all.  She suspected it was gone forever.

            It wasn’t until years later, when she was a mother of three screaming children, that she wished she had taken the key.

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